Thursday, October 8, 2009

Sentence Three

The Kite Runner by Khaled Hosseini

His sentence: The water was a deep blue and sunlight glittered on its looking glass- clear surface.

My thoughts: I think that the way the author used the dash to end the sentence that contained a great deal of imagery was very successful in making his claim. He used details throughout the sentence of how the water looked but ended in a nice and to the point statement.

My sentence: The child's eyes were a soft teal and a twinkle shone in their waters- endless sea.

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